Writer's Block: Six-Word Story

[packbat]

What makes you feel better when you're mad? Submitted By kimmayeisblack View other answers

Tried this a few times before, but I suppose I'll give it another go:

Day 16: Jeff begun spoiling. Lonely.

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[jfs.livejournal.com]

Radio 4 (in the UK) did a similar competition where you had to write a saga in less than 50 words, about 20 years ago. If I take their winning entry, I can get it down to 8 words, but not 6.

"The kiss hurt more than the nails."

[packbat.livejournal.com]

That's good, though. Definitely in the spirit of the exercise, despite the extra word.

(I think a number of people have held competitions along those lines - I'm pretty sure Wired had a feature of six-word stories.)

[toya121.livejournal.com]

How may I direct your call?

[packbat.livejournal.com]

Ha! I saw that. :P

[majoru.livejournal.com]

I love Hemingway's Baby shoes story... it contains so much emotion in so few words.
Yours isn't bad either, it has a couple of different interpretations at least... nice. Poor Jeff, though. [smiles]

[packbat.livejournal.com]

"Baby shoes" really is magnificent. I don't think there are many short works that can compare.

Thanks! Yeah, Jeff's certainly not in good shape, there... :D